1. What has the comments others have
posted on my blog taught me about my own writing?
The comments
others have posted on my blog makes me very interesting. It is because sharing
thinking with others is very awesome. As I think sharing thinking is one of
social activities, so it is social network service to me like Face book or
Twitter. Besides it is better than those SNS. Because I can learn something
helpful on my writing. There are 3 things that I can learn by others comments.
First of all, I can revise something grammatically wrong on my blogpost. As I have
some grammatical mistake on my blogpost, they told me which is wrong. If you look
at the example 1, you may understand very easily. Secondly, I can know what is
right and what is wrong on my topic and reason. Through this, I think more
about my topic and reason. Thinking more on my topic and reason helps me to do
away with stereotype. For better writing, I search more examples on the
internet and book. If you look at the example 2 and 3, you may know that I am
on right path on the writing. Finally, I can fix something which is not main
text like citation error. Now I am considerably good at writing reference. However
when I begin to write citation on my blog, my citations are very
unsatisfactory. At that time, some people told me that I need more specific
citation and they let me know the right way to make better citation. The example
4 shows the advice which helped me. In conclusion, I think I can learn 3 thing
which is helpful to my writing by reading comments.
Ex1)
Hi A-Hyun,
Your paragraph was very intriguing and I had fun reading yours (:
I would like to give you some suggestions that can make your paragraph a bit more complete! The word 'moreover' in the third sentence should be 'Moreover.' (the letter 'm' should be capitalized since it is a starting word of the sentence. Secondly, you might want to add an 'a' in front of the phrase 'sensitive person' in the fourth sentence. Because a mother is a singular person, it is grammatically correct to add an 'a’. Besides, those small mistakes, your paragraph is well-explained and nicely arranged with concise details. (:
I hope my suggestions were helping to you!
Sincerely,
So Young Yoon
Your paragraph was very intriguing and I had fun reading yours (:
I would like to give you some suggestions that can make your paragraph a bit more complete! The word 'moreover' in the third sentence should be 'Moreover.' (the letter 'm' should be capitalized since it is a starting word of the sentence. Secondly, you might want to add an 'a' in front of the phrase 'sensitive person' in the fourth sentence. Because a mother is a singular person, it is grammatically correct to add an 'a’. Besides, those small mistakes, your paragraph is well-explained and nicely arranged with concise details. (:
I hope my suggestions were helping to you!
Sincerely,
So Young Yoon
Ex2)
Hello
A-Hyun,
I'm glad to read your post. Your post is specific and concise.
You are a sensitive person and you like silent area. Many people are same with you,
like me too. But you feel less tired for bright light, not same with me. My eyes are more tired for bright light, so I use medium light.
I'm glad to read your post. Your post is specific and concise.
You are a sensitive person and you like silent area. Many people are same with you,
like me too. But you feel less tired for bright light, not same with me. My eyes are more tired for bright light, so I use medium light.
Ex3)
Dear Ahyun,
Your topic is so attractive because it is against common knowledge. It breaks my stereotype that Yellow Dust has only negative effects on environment. Explanation is specialized, so I can understand principal of reasons why Yellow Dust is good for environment. However, I think there are unnecessary sentence to make your topic sentence unclear. That is “Of course it has many negative effect.” Your controlling idea is helpful for our environment, but readers might recall its negative effect when they read it. Finally, there is a small mistake in spelling. You need to change a word ‘ueutralize’ to ‘neutralize’ on line 12. I wish you will write a developed article in final draft. Good luck!
Have a nice day,
Jongbum
Your topic is so attractive because it is against common knowledge. It breaks my stereotype that Yellow Dust has only negative effects on environment. Explanation is specialized, so I can understand principal of reasons why Yellow Dust is good for environment. However, I think there are unnecessary sentence to make your topic sentence unclear. That is “Of course it has many negative effect.” Your controlling idea is helpful for our environment, but readers might recall its negative effect when they read it. Finally, there is a small mistake in spelling. You need to change a word ‘ueutralize’ to ‘neutralize’ on line 12. I wish you will write a developed article in final draft. Good luck!
Have a nice day,
Jongbum
Ex4)
Hello Ahyun,
The paragraph was very interesting! I didn't realize that the yellow dust has good points. I think it is nice to the environment without humans (I can't love the yellow dust still). Thank you for the new scientific information! However, I think you should write more exact citation. I suggest you to visit the website "http://citationmachine.net," and rewrite the citation in APA style.
Best wishes,
Yang Joon Yong
The paragraph was very interesting! I didn't realize that the yellow dust has good points. I think it is nice to the environment without humans (I can't love the yellow dust still). Thank you for the new scientific information! However, I think you should write more exact citation. I suggest you to visit the website "http://citationmachine.net," and rewrite the citation in APA style.
Best wishes,
Yang Joon Yong
2) What have the comments I have posted on
other blogs taught me about writing?
The comments which I have posted on other blogs helps me
to write better by 2 ways. First of all, writing comments makes me thinking
about some unfamiliar topic. When I posted my individual opinion on other
blogs, I should think more and even search the internet about unfamiliar topic.
It helps me to think and write more variously. For this reason, I think I can
write more specifically by writing comments. Secondly, I can concern about writing
better expression by writing comments. Because it is comment which is for other
not me, so it makes me more consider about some expression. To sum up, I can
learn 2 ways to write better and you can see several examples below this text.
Ex1)
EW2-082
W/F
Hello yuyeong Lee, you really live longtime in Changdong!
I agree with that you have memory of there.
I can empathize with you because before I moved my house to Jamsil,
I live in Daechi-dong and I really miss there!
I have countless memories in there too.
For example, I have memory that I went private education
institute with my friends!
I still go there
because many of my friends are still live in there!
I recommend you to
visit there frequently and meet your friends! It really helps you to feel
better!
Have a nice day,
A-hyun
Ex2)
EW2-082
W/F
Hello sujin!
I read your second
blogpost very interestingly.
I know that many
high school student in Korea study on the library desk which has partition wall
and I hate it too!
It makes me feel
very lonely! I agree with you that desk must be tidy!
For these reason,
recommend you to go 4th floor in school library! This place is not
too closed and this place is very quiet too!
Moreover there are
several couches, so you can take the rest and relieve your stress in there.
I wish you can
study well in there!
Have a nice day,
A-hyun
Ex3)
EW2-047
T/Th
Hi Jihye!
I read your post
very interestingly! Your motivational area looks very comfortable and cozy!
I think your
motivational area is good to study too!
My motivational
place is school library and I want to recommend you too!
There are big
couches in 4th floor of Sejong university library. Moreover there
are several study room and it can help you to do team project!
Anyway! If you
will make your motivational area likes an image, please invite me! I want to
visit the place!
Thanks,
A-hyun
Dear A-hyun,
답글삭제Hi A-hyun,
I’m happy to read your writing. It was really fresh for me because you added many examples. I didn’t think that method at all, so your paragraphs were interested to me. It made me understand yours easily. As you show your examples, you wrote why comments were helpful for you, and I think it is really persuasive. Mr. Rue who is my MIS professor said, “It is good that writing your opinion with suitable examples.” When I read yours, I remembered what he said. Thank you for you, and I’ll remember that for next time.
I hope to read your another writing next time.
Thanks,
Jihyeon
Hello Ahyun,
답글삭제Wow, it is really good to hear that my comment could help your writing, and I'm absolutely glad to hear you say that. It's a good thing that my comment didn't hurt your feeling. I'm sure that other people who you wrote in your post will happy too if they read your post. By the way, I have to say thank you to Jihyeon. If she didn't come to my blog and recommend me to visit your blog, maybe I couldn't see this post. Again, I'm very pleased to read your post. Thank you.
Best wishes,
Yang Joon Yong
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답글삭제Dear Ahyun,
답글삭제It's very interesting and rich story. Seeing your paragraph, I think you are the most sincere person who conducts Gary's assignment. It's impressive that you used examples of comments, and I think it's very special idea. Also, you followed paragraph's rules while other peoples are not. I could learn one more thing again by comment to you.
Thanks,
Jeonggeun
Dear Ahyun
답글삭제I read your post with vivid interesting. Your post is very detail. But my post isn't detail besides yours. So, I'm ashamed. I learned a lot of things from your post.
Thanks,
Wonil